P5 : Write an original article for TV broadcast
Below is my final article and video
P6: Use sub-editing skills to finalise an article for broadcast
After I showed my first draft, I corrected the multiple mistakes I had made for example long
unnecessary sentences I had, I then made it shorter. The final draft has a different structure written
at the start and there is now a headline. This is my second and final draft, my headline is
"A Finnish School"
unnecessary sentences I had, I then made it shorter. The final draft has a different structure written
at the start and there is now a headline. This is my second and final draft, my headline is
"A Finnish School"
M4: Explain mode of address and structure used
What is the purpose of the article you have to write?
The purpose of my article is to show the nation that there are some major flaws in the education
system that children today are affected by. By making this article, if it peaks the interest of the
child, they may want to tell their parents about it and this will create a wider audience as parents
would also have an interest in this topic. Not many people in the UK have said out their views on
the system and been heard even though so many people agreeing with what they said. This article,
if anything it will offer a small push to change the education system in this country for the better.
Who is the audience?
The target audience intended for this article are firstly children who watch newsround and hopefully
if the news gets any attention from the parents, they can also be included in the target audience as
they are the parents of the children who are going to school. This news appeals to this audience as
they all have some sort of relation to this topic.
Should the language be informal or formal and why?
The article I have written is quite serious and so there is no need to make the language informal.
I decided to write it formally as I think it is likely parents will read this news, if the news were to
appear informal, then the readers would not take the news so seriously and may not believe the
information to be 100% trustworthy.
Is the style direct or indirect?
The style of writing is indirect as I never address the audience, I only addressed myself for example
"I asked him about", although one of the people interviewed himself and the audience as we
"I feel that we are too".
Should the tone be teacher to pupil, parent to child or peer to peer?
Remember this is Newsround what is the expected tone and how does your article achieve this?
My article used a peer to peer tone as it never addressed the audience to be children or adults, it
only gave small factual information and large amounts of interview quotes from qualified peers.
My article archives this by giving information that can be read by anyone, although it could have
been a bit more geared towards younger audience.
Why did you use the images/video you used? How did they enhance the article for the audience?
I used those videos because the first is taken inside of the school in which the Finnish teacher/
principal worked in, it gives the viewer a better idea of what it looks like inside those kind of schools.
The other videos which are interviews where taken either with a screen recorder or a phone camera.
By having the person interviewed being seen and listened to can make the viewer more willing to
keep watching the video.
Are your initial sentences structured so that the ‘who’, ‘what’ and ‘where’ is clear in the opening
paragraph? Give examples.
My article follows this structure as it says "According to multiple articles like the independent,
business insider uk and Fair Reporters, Finland has one of the top education systems in the world".
The paragraph tells you who which is "Finland", tells you what "top education system" and where
"independent, business insider uk and Fair Reporters".
Does your next few paragraphs include the ‘why’ and ‘how’? Give examples.
Yes, it shows it on the following paragraphs, why "Our kids aren't so stressed at school because they
don't have to do these testing" and how "The biggest difference is that we don't have any national
testing in our schools".
Did you include at least two of the most useful and valid sources that were evaluated in D1?
Discuss how these enhanced your article
In my article, I wanted to add different information from different sources. My two most useful
sources were the two people I interviewed because what they were saying was mostly factual and
had valid opinions coming from two educators. The most useful out of does too was the interview
with Mr Louhivuor because apart of giving me his opinion, he gave me first hand evidence of the
Finnish education. Second was the interview with Mr Baxter as he mainly gave his opinions on the
matter, he also gave some facts that he knew but it wasn't my main goal to get those facts.
D2: Justify the choice of sourced information to be referenced within the article List at least
three ways my article does or does not break the Editor's Code of Practice and explain why:
Accuracy
My article does not break this rule as it has information from reliable sources, the interview
information is written word for word and it won't be confused with factual information taken from
reliable sources as I put the conversation lines in quote marks.
Privacy
I did not ask the two people who I interviewed anything about their own private lives, the presentation
the gave mentioning their names and how long they have been teaching at their start was given to
me with their own free will.
Children
The video I have used contains children, I made sure to ask permission for the use of this video
before editing it. The person who took the video was given permission by the school to take footage
from the inside and outside of the building and film the children.
List several ways that my article breaks or does not break the OFCOM Broadcasting Code Guidance
(specifically: Sections 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 7 and 8) and explain why:Section 1: Protecting under 18s
My video and story does not show any violence, sexual content, graphic content or bad language.
This is because it is intended to be able to broadcast on the BBC Newsround, and therefore it must
be suitable for people under 18.
Section 2: Harm and offence
My story does not show anything that could harm or offend an audience member. I made sure my
information is accurate by going through the sources to make sure no wrong information is shown
to the audience that could maybe offend them.
Section 3: Crime, disorder, hatred and abuse
My article does talk about two different school systems, but at no point the article says any hate
speech to either of them or says any abusive comments.
Section 4: Religion
My story does not mention any religious subjects or anything related as it has nothing to do with it.
Section 5: Due impartiality and due accuracy
My article is completely unbiased , which is why I had people interviewed so they could be bias.
The information is from reliable sources, the interview information is written word for word and
it won't be confused with factual information taken from reliable sources as I put the conversation
lines in quote marks.
Section 7: Fairness
Because my story was about two different school systems, I made it fair by having both a Finnish
teacher interviewed and a British teacher interviewed.
Section 8: Privacy
I did not ask the two people who I interviewed anything about their own private lives, the presentation
the gave mentioning their names and how long they have been teaching at their start, was given to
me with their own free will.
List several ways that my article breaks or does not break the BBC Editorial Guidelines (specifically
the Sections on Accuracy, Impartiality, Harm and Offence, Fairness, Privacy, Reporting Crime, Children
and Young People as Contributors, Editorial Integrity) and explain why:
The purpose of my article is to show the nation that there are some major flaws in the education
system that children today are affected by. By making this article, if it peaks the interest of the
child, they may want to tell their parents about it and this will create a wider audience as parents
would also have an interest in this topic. Not many people in the UK have said out their views on
the system and been heard even though so many people agreeing with what they said. This article,
if anything it will offer a small push to change the education system in this country for the better.
Who is the audience?
The target audience intended for this article are firstly children who watch newsround and hopefully
if the news gets any attention from the parents, they can also be included in the target audience as
they are the parents of the children who are going to school. This news appeals to this audience as
they all have some sort of relation to this topic.
Should the language be informal or formal and why?
The article I have written is quite serious and so there is no need to make the language informal.
I decided to write it formally as I think it is likely parents will read this news, if the news were to
appear informal, then the readers would not take the news so seriously and may not believe the
information to be 100% trustworthy.
Is the style direct or indirect?
The style of writing is indirect as I never address the audience, I only addressed myself for example
"I asked him about", although one of the people interviewed himself and the audience as we
"I feel that we are too".
Should the tone be teacher to pupil, parent to child or peer to peer?
Remember this is Newsround what is the expected tone and how does your article achieve this?
My article used a peer to peer tone as it never addressed the audience to be children or adults, it
only gave small factual information and large amounts of interview quotes from qualified peers.
My article archives this by giving information that can be read by anyone, although it could have
been a bit more geared towards younger audience.
Why did you use the images/video you used? How did they enhance the article for the audience?
I used those videos because the first is taken inside of the school in which the Finnish teacher/
principal worked in, it gives the viewer a better idea of what it looks like inside those kind of schools.
The other videos which are interviews where taken either with a screen recorder or a phone camera.
By having the person interviewed being seen and listened to can make the viewer more willing to
keep watching the video.
Are your initial sentences structured so that the ‘who’, ‘what’ and ‘where’ is clear in the opening
paragraph? Give examples.
My article follows this structure as it says "According to multiple articles like the independent,
business insider uk and Fair Reporters, Finland has one of the top education systems in the world".
The paragraph tells you who which is "Finland", tells you what "top education system" and where
"independent, business insider uk and Fair Reporters".
Does your next few paragraphs include the ‘why’ and ‘how’? Give examples.
Yes, it shows it on the following paragraphs, why "Our kids aren't so stressed at school because they
don't have to do these testing" and how "The biggest difference is that we don't have any national
testing in our schools".
Did you include at least two of the most useful and valid sources that were evaluated in D1?
Discuss how these enhanced your article
In my article, I wanted to add different information from different sources. My two most useful
sources were the two people I interviewed because what they were saying was mostly factual and
had valid opinions coming from two educators. The most useful out of does too was the interview
with Mr Louhivuor because apart of giving me his opinion, he gave me first hand evidence of the
Finnish education. Second was the interview with Mr Baxter as he mainly gave his opinions on the
matter, he also gave some facts that he knew but it wasn't my main goal to get those facts.
D2: Justify the choice of sourced information to be referenced within the article List at least
three ways my article does or does not break the Editor's Code of Practice and explain why:
Accuracy
My article does not break this rule as it has information from reliable sources, the interview
information is written word for word and it won't be confused with factual information taken from
reliable sources as I put the conversation lines in quote marks.
Privacy
I did not ask the two people who I interviewed anything about their own private lives, the presentation
the gave mentioning their names and how long they have been teaching at their start was given to
me with their own free will.
Children
The video I have used contains children, I made sure to ask permission for the use of this video
before editing it. The person who took the video was given permission by the school to take footage
from the inside and outside of the building and film the children.
List several ways that my article breaks or does not break the OFCOM Broadcasting Code Guidance
(specifically: Sections 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 7 and 8) and explain why:Section 1: Protecting under 18s
My video and story does not show any violence, sexual content, graphic content or bad language.
This is because it is intended to be able to broadcast on the BBC Newsround, and therefore it must
be suitable for people under 18.
Section 2: Harm and offence
My story does not show anything that could harm or offend an audience member. I made sure my
information is accurate by going through the sources to make sure no wrong information is shown
to the audience that could maybe offend them.
Section 3: Crime, disorder, hatred and abuse
My article does talk about two different school systems, but at no point the article says any hate
speech to either of them or says any abusive comments.
Section 4: Religion
My story does not mention any religious subjects or anything related as it has nothing to do with it.
Section 5: Due impartiality and due accuracy
My article is completely unbiased , which is why I had people interviewed so they could be bias.
The information is from reliable sources, the interview information is written word for word and
it won't be confused with factual information taken from reliable sources as I put the conversation
lines in quote marks.
Section 7: Fairness
Because my story was about two different school systems, I made it fair by having both a Finnish
teacher interviewed and a British teacher interviewed.
Section 8: Privacy
I did not ask the two people who I interviewed anything about their own private lives, the presentation
the gave mentioning their names and how long they have been teaching at their start, was given to
me with their own free will.
List several ways that my article breaks or does not break the BBC Editorial Guidelines (specifically
the Sections on Accuracy, Impartiality, Harm and Offence, Fairness, Privacy, Reporting Crime, Children
and Young People as Contributors, Editorial Integrity) and explain why: